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[pep]

.. thanks

[doubledip]

whoa pep, i think this has a shit load of potential. classic circus techno!! (that's a compliment) :D

the main elements of the track are really nice - i could see it doing some early morning damage to a dance floor! my only thought (granted i know nothing about music composition so take my 2 cents for what it's worth)... there a few different times when there was an added layer of sound that seemed to be working against the track not with it (2:02 for example)

nice job tho! can't wait to hear the final!!

[Loka]

i love it. can't think of what i'd do to change it. when you're done send me this bitch!!!!:nod:

[mojojojo]

excellent track :toke:

[bsb2002]

loved it at the beginning when it was very trax. about 90 seconds in the bassline turned it very twilo. still well done, but it wasnt my thing anymore

[pep]

cool... thanks for the feedback everyone!

I'll def hit you all with a copy once done.

[Sunburn]

nice... needs to be polished a bit -but still sounds good!

[Der geile Ami]

I think its either 2 minutes too long or two minutes too short. Okay, maybe a minute each way. It'# mainly about the intro/outro development. let the track run out its elements. You build the track back up to a peak a minute before it ends and let it ride, but it just stops. The foundational elements in the intro come together too quickly for me. That would be fine for me if the body was shortened. It's a nice musical idea overall and I find the stuff in the body is okay. It's admittedly not my style, but I wouldnt go tweaking too much more in the middle, just work on hte outsides or reduce the middle.

[roxybaby523]

I love the way you started it off. Awesome. I feel like it gets a bit lost around 2-3 mins. 3 mins in.. 3.50 is fuckin sick! I wish the ending was a bit longer.. a bit more like the beginning maybe? it just kinda stops abruptly...

Really awesome Frank. I can't believe you made this. ( I mean I can believe it, but it's pretty freakin kewl of you...) :)

[TWIZTED NATION]

what I would do is bring the 8 bars you got @ the 6 minute mark in 8 bars earlier like @ 5:45 then the 8 bars u currently have @ 5:45 can come in @ 6 minutes then u ca start working your outro a bit from that point.SOlid work mind numbing sounds kid reminds me of some old haunting mtrl I used to hear back in the day @ limelight. This is some wickedly dark twizted mtrl will blow any floor up. Hit me up kid I might be able to help you out with this one.

[pep]

thanks! ..ill def be in touch

[chazzdee]

hey pep whut site or server did u use to host that shit up here man ?

also tracks hot good melody needs sum efx to add that tension maybe a delay or verb to draw out the tones befor n pre drops

[Mike n Pike]

Nice one! Very trippy, melodic techno you got rolling there. I do agree about bringing the foundational elements of the track in a bit slower and more paced out - this will help build anticipation in the listener. And I also agree w/ others' comments re: the outro - letting the elements run their course and carving them out of the track after the peak... but v. nice overall - lemme know when it's up on BP ;)

[matadorm]

dude, this is tight. totally something i could hear Dixon or Ame playing at around 3am in the morning in Berlin, smoking a cigarette, getting a BJ under the DJ booth...ok i'll stop

seriously tho, i think this is tight, but the bassline needs to be more rugged and a bigger part of the track. it just seems really flat but i get the idea. i think a more liberal bass layered on the kick and some low-end, sweeping synths would do this track super-right. you already did most of the hard part and it rocks bro.

[DeepSpell]

this is tight frank. im liking it. try lowering the attack on that bassline. would sound dope IMHO. :nod:

[Der geile Ami]

dude, this is tight. totally something i could hear Dixon or Ame playing at around 3am in the morning in Berlin, smoking a cigarette, getting a BJ under the DJ booth...ok i'll stop


it would be much later, a joint, and i dont think there are any booths in berlin where one could easily get a bj while playing without everyone watching.

[matadorm]

it would be much later, a joint, and i dont think there are any booths in berlin where one could easily get a bj while playing without everyone watching.

tuche :D

[DeepSpell]

tuche :D

touché :p

[matadorm]

touché :p

that was a joke....

http://www.rhythmism.com/forum/showthread.php?t=63725

:lol: :lol: :lol:

[DeepSpell]

that was a joke....

http://www.rhythmism.com/forum/showthread.php?t=63725

:lol: :lol: :lol:

whoops! missed taht one dood. sorry!


tuche! :lol:

[matadorm]

whoops! missed taht one dood. sorry!


tuche! :lol:


haha...i just thought i would throw it out there and see if anyone remembered that one...

[pep]

Thanks a lot everyone for the feedback & suggestions, all duly noted. Gonna finish it ASAP.



Also, if anyone wants to take a crack at a remix, get in touch! I'll be releasing this thru my own label, which I'm starting up & hope to have up & running by march

[DeepSpell]

Thanks a lot everyone for the feedback & suggestions, all duly noted. Gonna finish it ASAP.



Also, if anyone wants to take a crack at a remix, get in touch! I'll be releasing this thru my own label, which I'm starting up & hope to have up & running by march

raises hand

[Excidium]

Nice work frank! :D